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A machine torn straight from the pages
of the War of the Worlds,
it has dug claws into the soil of old Dundrum
and hunkered down on its haunches.

St. George's Bells peel its arrival.
Spider on spider on spider,
little feet disturb hairs
on the back of my hands,
and ivy sinks first roots
into concrete - the webs we weave,

the bridges new lovers build for each other,
rigging stretches to the sky
and wind plays the cables like a harp.
It is like a beached ship, you whispered.
Before it landed here on our small planet
a sail of purest whitest energy
stretched from that thin curved mast,
I replied.

Those pillars hide the shaft of a glass elevator
and, deep in the caverns they have hollowed
beneath the streets of Dundrum,
small fat-eyed men with silver suits and laser guns
watch us as we make love on the tracks
of Dundrum Luas bridge-
stars pulsing above us,
cars pulsing below
and Mars hovering, unblinking,
an ever-watchful eye.
©2008-2009 ~a-random-quigle
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Author's Comments

After half a month off, I've started writing again. Now I have about a dozen things in mid-process. Gah! Overload.

I vaguely feel like I should clean-up my message centre and go around returning the love by doing some commenting before I submit anything new. But well, where's the time? Can somebody lend me some?

I decided to write this after reading Under South Bridge by *TheObviousChild. She mentioned how she been given the task of writing about a bridge in her city. I thought I'd try the same.

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Edit: A DD! :dance:

Thank you to the wonderful *fllnthblnk and ^StJoan.

And thank you all for the comments and favs - those that I have received so far and any that I receive in the future... A particularly big thank you to anyone who takes the time out comment... I really appreciate your time and energy! :blowkiss:

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Daily Deviation

Given 2008-04-28

The New Bridge by *a-random-quigle is Sarah's first piece posted after her year-long poem-a-day extravaganza. The poem displays a very strong poetic voice, something that the year of straight writing has apparently honed. I just love the detail and the almost surrealistic way she describes a bridge in her city. This is the kind of piece I wanted to read and reread, and perhaps visit a local bridge of my own and find some way to put it into such potent words as this deviant has. (Suggested by ^fllnthblnk and Featured by ^StJoan)

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:iconoddlyaromatic:
Stars cars Mars.

We should eat dinner soon. I have jury duty coming up. This is my news.

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Ice cream.
:iconfllnthblnk:
You have a wonderful voice in your poetry. Dear Ma'am, I am envious. :shakefist:

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Clearfield Review: Prose, Poetry, Art.
:iconking-crow:
Jaysus, this is brilliant. Never thought the Luas could be beautiful. Really surreal, reminds of things I've written before. Managed to take a normal bridge and turn it into something from 1930's science-fiction. Have a writers eye anyhow.

Nice to see a bit of local talent as well, well you're hardly 'local', me being in the south east, but you're in Ireland (and possibly from).

Congradualtions on the daily deviation.
:iconharlequinism:
Wow, this is terrific work. It flows like water, and the visuals are fantastic! Very nicely done:)

And congrats on the DD, it is well deserved :thumbsup::thumbsup:

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Epiphany: a sudden and powerful understanding of something previously misinterpreted.


I want to spawn epiphanies in every generation.
:iconmagnumforcerock:
Woo! A poem about Dundrum is a DD! You should write one about the Nine Arches, the bridge between the Windy Arbour (where I live) and Milltown stops, it'd be a nice contrast of old and new, or maybe I'll write it...I'll race ya!
:iconpaintby666:
I like your work. Very rich and visual. Thanks.
:iconalter-caelum:
Well written, I can almost picture everything.

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Limo Wreck Superstar!!
:icondarkecho3:
I really like this, it has some sort of hidden power and rhythm beneath the words.
:iconmacowl:
this is really really good!
i especially like the last verse
with the rhyming at the start

i like the imagery too
just
generally
a great piece of work

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- Michael -

"If you are so set on running...Hadn't you best be off?"

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